She Becomes Ugly if She Doesn’t Study

"Mr. Liu, wait a second." Tang Su called out immediately when Mr. Liu was about to leave.

Teacher Liu Yan then turned around and looked at Tang Su.

"Do you have any questions?" Teacher Liu asked.

This Tang Su rarely asked her questions, almost never.

Tang Su then took the Chinese test paper from his last exam and walked to the podium, and then said a little embarrassedly: "Mr. Liu, I have never been able to get a high score in my composition, and I have to deduct about ten or twenty points every time. I want to know where exactly I am deducting points and why I get low marks every time."

Tang Su felt depressed when he remembered his composition, and he had no solution. She has read a lot of those high-scoring compositions, but she just can't learn it.

Teacher Liu then sat down. She turned over the paper that Tang Su handed over and looked at the composition written by Tang Su.

The first grade exam papers were graded by the second grade teacher, so she didn't know what Tang Su wrote in the exam.

After reading it carefully, Teacher Liu looked at Tang Su and said, "Your composition is not off topic, but there are indeed many problems."

Tang Su took out a notebook and pen at this time, ready to write down what the teacher said.

Mr. Liu continued: "First, it is the idea. The idea of ​​your "Do what you can" is still in line with the content expressed in the material. It does not deviate from the topic, but it is not novel. The first material expresses the two materials given in this test question. The meaning is: people should not be too ambitious, but down-to-earth and down-to-earth to live and work. The second material expresses the meaning: if you can't do something with all your strength, then you must know how to give up. Instead of digging into the bull's-eye. Your idea is to focus on the second material, of course, but there is a better idea, such as: we have to accept the ordinary self, this idea is expressed in accordance with the two materials at the same time the central idea.”

Second, it is an example. Although the example you gave in the article does not deviate from the central idea of ​​the article, it is very old-fashioned and has no new ideas. For example, the example of "The Foolish Old Man Moves the Mountain", I think there must be many students who use this example to grade papers in this way. When the teacher saw it, there was no surprise at all.

The third is the structure of the article. Your article still uses the most conventional three-paragraph method, the beginning, the middle, and the end. Although this is possible, the content in the middle is so much that the grading teacher can't even see the central idea of ​​your paragraph at a glance. Just look at it. Scores will be given at the beginning and the end. That would be worse.

Finally, it is the expression of the article, that is, we often talk about whether there is literary talent. Your article sentences are smooth, but the whole is plain and straightforward, there are no beautiful or emotional sentences, and some sentences have some language errors and punctuation. Symbol error.

The sum of these points will lead to your entire article, although there is no major problem, but the writing is very ordinary, so you can only get 33 points.

Teacher Liu patiently explained to Tang Su.

Tang Su wrote down all these points. It seems that her article is not only a lack of literary talent, but also almost lack of color.

"Teacher, what should I do then? Is there any way to improve?" Tang Su then asked.

She thinks that as long as her composition can be improved by one grade, her Chinese performance can be further improved.

Teacher Liu then gave Tang Su some extreme suggestions, including purchasing composition materials, accumulating cases, writing and reading more, and developing a sense of writing.