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This is a passer-by himself, and he has made such a request, and Shiyu of Kasumigaoka knows that it is very inappropriate.

But Mr. Jotaro was more kind and talkative than she imagined, and the other party agreed to her request without any hesitation.

At that moment, Xiazhiqiu Shiyu was extremely excited.

Just facing unfamiliar people, she maintains her usual elegance and skill, like the cold iceberg talented girl on campus.

I am afraid.…

She just didn't want to show the other side in front of her idol.

After all, habit comes naturally.

In front of acquaintances, Xia Zhiqiu Shiyu has always maintained a black-bellied and vicious tongue.

Seeing that the two of them didn't speak, Xie Jun could only speak to break the short silence. He said politely, "Mr. Xia Shizi, can you show me your manuscript?"

Xiazhiqiu Shiyu was a little flattered, and shook his head again and again: "Teacher Jotaro still ask me to sell poetry or Shiyu, I can't afford the title of "teacher". By the way, this is my second volume of manuscripts!"

She looked a little hurried, and hurriedly opened the laptop on the table and handed it to Xie Jun.

The latter looked at the girl who was very different from the original book with some amusing.

How does it feel that the other party doesn't look like Shiyu of Kasumigaoka at all.

However, he did not struggle with this issue, and began to read the other party's novels seriously.

The story of the second volume of "Love Metronome" continues the content of the first volume.

It still tells about the love and resentment entanglement between men and women on campus. Generally speaking, there is not much problem, but it is a little too familiar.

Kasumigaoka Shiyu looked nervous, staring straight at Xie Jun's face, looking a little anxious.

The two little hands under the table were also constantly fiddling, for fear that the other party would pick out countless faults.

Her current state of mind is extremely tangled, even contradictory.

Not only hope that the other party to point out their shortcomings, there is a desire to get the other party's approval.

After all, Xie Jun is No. 1 in the light novel world. It is definitely a proud thing to have the other side recognize his novels.

It's just that Shiyu of Kasumigaoka knew that this was her wishful thinking.

Compared with Xie Jun's, her works still have a big gap.

After a long time, Xie Jun closed the computer, returned it to Shiyu of Kasumigaoka, and then said: "The story is generally not too problematic, but the emotional handling is not meticulous enough, and the emotional line between the male and female protagonists is too simple, and there is no way to put it together. It's a complete outburst of emotion."

He presents his opinion objectively.

Kasumigaoka Shiwa and Machida Yuanko nodded in unison.

They are all aware of this issue.

To put it bluntly, the story is too monotonous, there is no fierce conflict, and it simply tells the love story of the hero and heroine.

But this is also impossible.

Neither of them has any experience in love, and they are completely blank in this regard, and they don't know how to start.

Don't look at Machida Yuanzi now approaching 30, but she has never had a boyfriend in her life, and she can almost become a magician.

It's a little bit underwhelming for someone who doesn't have any love experience to try to write a good romance novel.

The reason why Shiyu of Kasumigaoka's "Love Metronome" can be published is that her own writing skills have a great advantage.

In terms of storytelling alone, it doesn't really have much of a feature.

After hesitating for a while, Xia Zhiqiu Shiyu summoned the courage and asked, "Then what should I do?"

Xie Jun laughed: "It's actually very simple, just create some rivals for the male and female protagonists, love triangle, light lily, in short, make the conflict between the characters more intense, so as to better stimulate the readers' emotions."

"There is another point, your writing is too deliberate, it is not that the writing is not good, but that some parts are too objective. Relax your mind, don't think about other things, and write your own stories as you like. "

Xiazhiqiu Shiyu's expression froze, but he didn't expect that his proud writing would become a part of his imprisonment.

In fact, when she was writing the first volume of "Metronome in Love", she already had that feeling. She always felt unnatural. The reason was her own writing.

It turns out that the decoration is too deliberate, but it will make the whole article seem heavy and unnatural.

Kasumigaoka Shiyu is a very smart girl, she understands her mistakes instantly and instantly understands her mistakes.

Nodding slightly, she said happily, "Thank you so much, Mr. Jotaro, your words really made me feel a little bit relieved."

Looking at the girl who forcibly calmed herself down, Xie Jun smiled and said, "Shi Yu, don't always call me Teacher Jotaro, (Zhao Hao) looks like I'm very old, if you don't mind, just call me Jie Jun Well, that's what my friends call them."

Xia Zhiqiu Shiyu paused, nodded and said, "Then I will be more respectful than obeying my life, and I will ask Xie Jun to take care of him in the future.

"As long as your novel is revised, there is basically no problem. Although it may not necessarily become a hit, it is no problem to be a best-seller. You must have confidence in yourself.

"Well, I see, thanks again for your help."

"Okay, if I have nothing to do, I will leave first, and you can go back and revise the manuscript.

Kasumigaoka Shiyu watched Xie Jun leave, an excited expression finally appeared on his face, and his eyes were full of gratitude.

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